Sunday postmortem

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China is a large place and proved a lot of ground to cover during a four-day, holiday week.

I think people can tell when the balance of a story leaned more toward more its reporting or writing. More of the latter is best, but is bolstered and made effective by the latter.

'Bill Bogaard, mayor of Pasadena, and Yunsheng Bai, Executive Deputy Governor of Xicheng (on behalf of Governor Lin Duo) have just signed a Memo of Understanding regarding the sister city relationship on the occasion of the fifth anniversary of their sister city relationship. The document was also signed by Alan Lamson, Chair of the China Subcommittee of the Pasadena Sister Cites Committee and Xinhua Teng, Director of the International Exchange Center of Xicheng. In addition to pledging to continue 'to foster friendly relations between the two cities,' Xicheng indicated that it plans to participate in the 2008 Tournament of Roses Parade. A delegation from Pasadena spent a week in Beijing (Oct. 11-16) to celebrate sister city activities, culminating in the signing of the MOU.' from http://www.passcc.org/xicheng/xicheng/news.html
Despite considerable reporting going into Sunday's story about Falun Gong, China and Pasadena, I was left with insufficient time for the actual writing, resulting in some marathon-length sentences that some rewrites would have weeded out.

But little space must have been available on the actual page because a considerable amount of the story was cut.

For example, several paragraphs pertaining to Mayor Bill Bogaard, who returned my anxiety-fortified messages Friday to speak about the issue from a beach he was visiting with his grandchildren.

And some other significant passages/context. I'll post the entirety here once I have access to it again.

5 Comments

AP said:
I have a suggestion for Grand Marshal: http://www.proctorformayor.com/2007/07/17/big-trouble-in-little-pasadena/
BigAssDolls said:
Would it be possible to PM me and tell me few more thinks about this. I am really a fan of your blog.
BigAss said:
Would it be possible to PM me and tell me few more thinks about this. I am really a fan of your blog.
lenen said:
Over de voor- en nadelen van het afsluiten van een lening zonder BKR-toetsing.
hypotheek said:
Hoeveel kan ik lenen? (hypotheek). Wat worden mijn maandlasten? (hypotheek) ... Hoeveel hypotheek heb ik nodig? Hoe hoog is de boete die ik nu zou moeten

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